Hate that last panel. XO
Awesome new page but I have to agree with you about the last panel. For a really weird reason, I could see the last panel working without the “shriek” bubble. A silent scream sort of thing would seem pretty cool. Also for the last panel, Jill’s body looks like it’s defying gravity. It’s an odd looking angle she’s in.
I had a feeling that was a ruse…
Oh dear, guess that plan went by the wayside!
I rather like the last panel. Plus wouldn’t YOU “SHRIEEEK!” if some Vampire bit into YOUR neck? o_O
Not necessarily. Some people would and others do that choked up gasping thing when they can’t scream due to shock. If I were to be bitten? Chances are I wouldn’t shriek. It just depends if you’re a screamer or not. :p
I was looking at that panel you dislike, and I think if he’d had his hand on her cheek (As if pulling it to the side) the image might have worked better. Or on her forehead… Heh…but if you’re anything like me, you loathe redo’s.
Jack and Jill interaction! Love it!
your art style is much better in these new pages, very nice! I hope he drains that girl dry until she’s dead. I can tell if she lives she’s going to be a pain.
Very sexy dude vampire, definitely like his attitude.
mmm, yes, because Jack is taller then Jill, having her being pulled back like that but him not leaning enough…makes it look like she’s off her feet. And also….unholy crap! o_o Definitly changing things aren’t you! O_O Instead of rescuing her from Raf and giving her a choice in the matter he straight up and bites her off the bat?! WOW. She’s certainly gonna hate him now…..now how will you get her to soften towards him I wonder….I cannot wait.
And Jill runs off to join the Vampire Hunter and instead Joins the Vampires.
So sad To Bad but I am so glad.
Well at least it was not to fetch a pail of water.
As for the change I think it’s a good one, Jacks a Monster and now so is Jill if she can find Hope and humanity in her self might mean finding it first and reviving it in Jack.
Don’t vampire have hypersensitive hearing? he’ll be hearing that scream for weeks….hmmm I wonder if that shirt will be stained.
Have to agree with Darwin00 about the hand placement, on the neck, it looks almost like he’s caressing her, instead of forcing her still for bite.
Also shouldn’t her body be in tighter to Jack’s? He doesn’t look like he has a good grasp on her and she’s going to fall.
I’ve been following you for years…and I gotta say, I like the remade story! Jill looks excellent!
Uh… I’m not really sure how these things happened the first time, cuz I never saw the origional, but so far, this has been very interesting! ^^
Hehe. Thanks. ^^
Wow this is pretty good now, I’m liking this much more than the original, however I must ask, was it necessary to name the top two characters Jack and Jill?
Haha, I don’t know. I decided on that a long time ago and just kind of stuck with it.
T^T Poor Jill
I now kinda want to have seen the original *sniffs